Okay, back into the groove. Sucks when you get in the reviewing mood and it’s fucking midnight, but it can’t be helped.
Release format: MKV (348 MB, 10-bit)
Japanesiness: No honorifics. Kuroyukihime used instead of something like “Black Snow Princess” or “Princess Snow Black”.
English style: American English.
Encoding details: http://pastebin.com/fB0CKYj9
8thsin’s translation critique: http://8ths.in/spring-2012-fansub-comparison-reviews#Accel
Ji-hi’s screenshot comparisons: N/A
Table of Contents
Opening. Not all that amazing, but it’s not exactly bad.
Ending. For some reason, they decided to skip the Japanese on this one.
What title translation?
Very readable. Thanks.
The grammar/spelling were fine, but I was a bit confused by the OP/ED translation. How can you “know” an eye? I’d have to see what the other groups did, but for now I’m gonna chalk it up to the Japanese song being weird.
06/01/12 Edit: Well, looks like Commie managed to make the OP not suck. You know what that means. Script downgrade fiesta. ^_^
What punctuation? Truly a joint as great as this has no need for the periods that mere mortals use.
What misuse of present-perfect tense?
“I just asked him to be my boyfriend.”
What needless repetition?
“I’m glad you understand now.” <- Best to get rid of the “realize, realized” phrasing. It’s lazy and doesn’t look good.
What poor line cutting and run-on sentence?
“Blue, red, yellow, green, purple, and white:”
“these are the ‘Six Kings of Pure Color.'”
“There has to be more…”
What inconsistent capitalization with the rest of the episode?
“You’re already more of a Burst Linker than me!”
What unnecessary comma?
Fat kid: You’re royalty?
Hot chick: No, silly.
Fat kid: Oh, the school’s local net.
Fat kid: That’s not safe?
Hot chick: Seems not.
WhatStory actually managed to pull off a decent string of English here, mostly because it flows quite naturally. Sage like.
I’m also gonna praise them for this line. “Dork” is the perfect word to use here. She’s not mad at him, so it wouldn’t be a strong word, and she’s not really saying he’s stupid, so it wouldn’t be something like “idiot”. “jerk” may be acceptable, but “dork” is better because it has less of an accusatory tone.
Visual grade: C+
Script grade: B–
Overall grade (timing results not factored in): B–
I would like to note that someone on staff for this show is fucking obsessed with the word “and”. He/She manages to throw that shit into every sentence at least twice.