Here’s the threeway I promised earlier.
We have three groups contending for this release, so let’s see how they did!
Filesize: 348mb (OP/ED omitted)
English: British, honorifics
Ordered chapters. Fuck that.
I have no idea why you want to use an old fashioned font like this, but whatever. The gradient’s done well and the boxes are aligned properly.
Same as the one before.
There’s not a lot of room here, so I won’t complain too much… but this could use a shadow.
Why you’d use a chalkboard font here is completely beyond me.
This scrolls, so without mocha, it’d be really hard, since it’s angled. just doing a \mov wouldn’t work because of the \frz. Doesn’t mean it’s impossible, though.
There’s a lot of text here. Come on. Give me something!
I can’t even read the text here.
Want to note the British spelling here.
You use numbers in one part and words in another. Be consistent.
Okay, I know Kuroko is pretty formal, but a criminal is not going to listen to this.
This is not why you’d use an em-dash. A comma would be just fine here.
This is a nitpick here.
Oh, my! We must make haste.
This is not how you stutter. You keep the capitalization with it.
What is this? “For the nonce”?
It’s fine, despite my complaints. Only a few things of note.
Filesize: 329mb (OP/ED included)
English: American, honorifics
You can’t even read the pre-highlight on some screens. The lines are sooooo long, too.
Again, the pre-highlight is hard to read. Also, with the color changes, the green sometimes clashes.
If you look carefully, you’ll notice that the boxed letters aren’t aligned properly.
Good thing I know the title of this show!
Just the ep title here.
I missed this screenshot from the other groups, but they didn’t typeset it either.
Well, I can kind of read it…
It’s actually 38 degrees. But nice try.
I believe you’re looking for the word “damping“.
This is not how you use a hyphen. A colon would be fine.
Look. She’s talking about Misaka’s confidence in the previous line, and then suddenly moves on to her boobs. Since she’s touching them and hasn’t yet referred to them, it –> this
Okay, this is elementary school level. “However” is not a conjunction that can connect two clauses. It either begins a sentence, ends a sentence, or interrupts right after the verb.
However, I can vouch that Uihara is very well mannered.
I can vouch that Uihara is very well mannered, however.
I can vouch, however, that Uihara is very well mannered.
But you DO NOT use it this way.
You need a comma before names.
I don’t think this is something a person would say.
after –> later
Comma splice, missing comma…
Missing a comma.
This is a horrible way to treat this line. The point gets across, but “grunt goon”? Really?
No. “But!” is not a sentence.
What a comma splice! This is a mess of a line.
Filesize: 338mb (OP/ED/preview omitted)
English: American English, honorifics
Another group with ordered chapters. fml.
Lazy mode activate! No gradients, no boxes!
More lazy mode!
Um, they tried?
At least they styled when they \an8’d?
Also, the preview is not included in the video.
First, get rid of that ‘of’.
Second, you want “ability’s”, not “abilities”.
I don’t think Misaka’s in the pool. She’s at the pool, though.
Wouldn’t the pool be on campus? This isn’t quite what she means.
Another of my nitpicks.
Oh, yeah. How did it go?
Just… don’t. No one else did this ‘FULL BLOOM!’ shit, so why did you?
Anyways is not a word.
She didn’t ask to meet “Onee-sama”, as in use the word “Onee-sama”. I know Kuroko is obsessive, but this is unecessary.
Onee-sama –> you.
Double space is really noticeable.
You do not use an em dash for a stutter, sorry.
Nor do you use two hyphens for an em dash! Geez, you used an em dash earlier, so you obviously know what it is!
tl;dr: Go with Chihiro, as long as you don’t mind ordered chapters. The other two are really bad, though AtsA takes the worst place.