Mezashite, why would you do this to me?
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Release format: MKV (323 MB, 10-bit)
Japanesiness: Honorifics. “Kya” used.
English style: American English.
Encoding details: http://pastebin.com/2x55km7L
Speed: Quick (<48 hours)
Group website: https://mezashitesubs.wordpress.com/
IRC channel: #email@example.com
SubCompare screenshot comparisons: http://www.subcompare.com/ore_no_kanojo_to_osananajimi_ga_shuraba_sugiru/
Opening. Good color/font choice, and it’s k-timed. Nice.
Ending. The color matches are suitable. Made the right call on not just repeating the same color for top and bottom.
I don’t have any problems with what they did, but that JoJo sign… ;_;
Never heard of line breaks? (And that font, goddamn…)
I have no clue what you’re trying to say here.
The Japanese can’t into plurals (insert joke about roneriness), but that doesn’t mean you can’t either. If you just made it “Girlish Lovers” in the English part of the line, you’d be fine.
This doesn’t really work. What, he’s never praised her before in any fashion?
No, rori had it better with “So you can be nice.”
“shameless”? There are like 30 other words you could have used to negatively describe a girl who waited for a guy to come see her.
“shameless” is at the bottom of that list.
In that first screen you wouldn’t use present tense, because the prank is already over. Also, use of the word “all” indicates it was something more elaborate than just making a girl wait for a guy who didn’t actually like her.
Besides that, these two screens are back-to-back, which leads to some awkward reading when you factor in the “but” from the first line and the “but” from the second line. It stands out as bad writing. Drop the “but” from the second line and you’ll be fine.
“You’ve said it too. // That I am… // a demon.”
Putting the demon bit in the past doesn’t fit because the point of the scene is that she’s still a demon.
All this put together reads as “Just because we’re partners in crime doesn’t mean you should pass our despair onto others.”
And that… doesn’t really make sense. The reason she brought up their being similar kinds of people (at least in terms of being loveless monsters) is because she wanted him to sympathize/agree with her decision to let Chiwa get gangraped.
What this line should be saying is “Just because we’re both broken, loveless freaks doesn’t give us the right to pass our misery onto others.”
Along with Masuzu kissing Eita and Eita leaving Masuzu to rescue Chiwa, this is one of the most important parts in the episode for their relationship. So no, I don’t take kindly to it being fucked up. (Even though Chiwa is best girl. Come at me, Masuzufags.)
Yes, yes I do.
Although Chihuahua is one of her nicknames, Eita would only use it sarcastically since he knows it bugs her. Put it in quotes and lowercase to reflect. Hey, how about that? Turns out grammar actually does affect understanding!
I’m this “chihuahua’s” childhood friend.
Pretty sure you mean “strike” or “blow”, not “hand”.
And no, minor errors like this don’t affect the score very much. I highlight them so you can get them right in the future. So let’s get to the root of why this needs to be done.
You use hyphens for adjectives. Because “messed up” is describing “guy”, you gotta hyphenate it. You don’t do this for words ending in -ly for some reason though. Look up hyphenated adjectives if you want more info on the subject. Review would be too long with a full lesson on this shit.
Huh? I would let it go if you said something like “He’s making my ears bleed” (even though that’s still shit), but his physical presence isn’t enough to cause one’s eyes to hurt.
Point is, he’s reacting in a negative way to Eita spazzing out. Try something more natural next time like “This guy’s brainfucked.” or “His ranting’s giving me a headache.”
He did say “kanojo”, yeah. But there’s a reason rori changed it to “she”. That is, all three of the girls who hear this line are supposed to think that what he said refers to them. Because two of them (Chiwa and Masuzu) already know that he’s dating Masuzu, there’s no confusion with his statement. So to get across that confusion, you can’t just directly translate it as “girlfriend” — you have to dance around it.
Not that I think rori’s choice was the best one, though. With “she”, they missed out on the strength of what he just said (and yes, it’s important).
What I’d go with is “my woman” over “my girlfriend”. Because that can be interpreted many different ways while still getting across the sentiment of “kanojo”.
What? Where the fuck did that come from? If you wanna go with that theme, why not “What are you planning to do with that toy?” ?
Goddamn did you fuck this up. It’s “at all”, not “very much”.
I realize you’re probably too stupid to understand the difference, so let me fucking lay it out for you:
“I don’t like you very much” implies that it’s still possible for her to like him, even just a little. But the point of this line is that she’s saying she doesn’t even have the most minimal amount of interest in him. It’s much less effective with the way Mezashite had it.
I wish your wrists were bleeding lakes. How fucking stupid do you have to be to write something like this?
Not even fucking close, Mezashite. Try “back then”. It’s been a long time since he yelled that out.
It’s not just context Mezashite is missing from this release — the sentences are poorly written as well, with needless repetition (back, back) and colorless language.
Not to say that’s a terrible thing, though. I mean, it only matters if you’re literate.
What? No. She has been heading home. She just walked with Eita to his house first and then walked all the way back to hers. Not that hard to get.
Stop ruining the show, Mezashite.
Nice subs, Mezashitty. (zing!)
Wait, what? Are you sure? I was under the impression the club was intended for Chiwa to become more popular. Masuzu doesn’t need more popularity and neither does Eita. That’s like… the entire basis of their relationship. How do you fuck this up?
And on second thought, it’s a “society for maidens”. This doesn’t make sense no matter how you look at it.
I think my sight would be better if I turned your shitty subs off.
What person? What exactly are you referring to here with a line like that?
Let me just copy in what rori had here so you can see what makes sense:
Your first wasn’t Harusaki Chiwa. It was me, Natsukawa Masuzu.
>Are you okay with this?
>Well, the person you kissed was a fake.
I admit I was half-asleep during the first part of this review, but I don’t recall the subs being this shit earlier on. Did you just give up?
were -> are
Christ, you guys really fucking let yourselves go by this point.
He could, he just doesn’t want to. Come on, anime is not that hard to sub.
I’d like to take this poorly timed scene (the dialogue occurs right here while the subs appear later) as an opportunity to let you know the timing is really shit in this episode.
Not “here”, “there”. He’s referring to her presence in his bathroom, which he is no longer in, so you need to use “there” to reflect that.
If you want to argue he’s talking about his house, then this needs to be more specific by saying “Wh-Why are you in my house?”
Why do you do this to me, Mezashite? Do you know how badly I wanted to say your release was a solid entry from an upcoming sub group? REALLY FUCKING BADLY.
Hire a goddamn editor. Please.
Visual grade: B-
Script grade: D-
Overall grade: D
It almost feels like Mezashite worked on the script for this show without watching it. A lot of these lines don’t really fit what’s going on, and the show suffers as a result.
I’d suggest watching rori’s over Mezashite’s. Next up: Oni’s.
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