What is a re-review? It’s another review for a group that thinks they didn’t get a fair shake or when they think they’ve improved so much that my previous review is invalid. I’ll only do re-edits upon requests from the groups themselves.
Oh, and time to work on those reviews I’ve promised everyone. Umm, Hiryuu-Hina’s Dog Days, re-review with Hina-Wasu’s Hen Zemi 02, the other groups doing Astarotte… I’ve promised so much I can’t even remember. Remind my dumb ass on IRC or something.
Muskmelon is actually a fruit. No need for special caps. Also, it’s mellow-tasting. You got the rule right for “fully-ripe”, though.
Why would you do this?
This line is supposed to be super short. How about “So this is ‘killing two birds with one stone!'”
even with a tank,
the Bishokuya, Toriko. And I still don’t think you needed to keep Bishokuya in Japanese.
This is not acceptable.
It looks like you already are. Fail@tense
One of those its is right. The other? Not so much.
Why “Those”? “The” works nicer in this context.
These don’t quite jive.
Really? Sure, I can imagine he’s talking about the courses he wants to find, but I doubt his “Drink” part of the full course menu is going to be living. Perhaps he wants to encounter all those delicious things rather than meet them all.
Overall grade: B-
When they let their editor edit, it works out a lot better. I take back my comment about their editor drinking bleach. I’d still go with AEarth_Kaen’s, though. Theirs seemed more natural.