Nice job, gg. You guys earned yourselves a solid D. Tamesuu, you said you’d v2 if I found errors, right? Get on it.
No OP this episode.
When I saw the title, I knew I was gonna be in for an interesting experience. Interesting capitalization rules there.
Oh my. This should be “Brother”. This is not a single, isolated incidence – it is dedicated stupidity.
Why? “Brother” is being used as a proper noun in this sense. Try replacing brother/father/etc. with the person’s name. If it makes sense, capitalize brother/father. If not, then don’t.
Spring should not be capitalized. “division”? Ugh.
This spring, he easily got into True Cross Academy High School.
But the older one only causes trouble.
If only? If only what? If you want to leave that line as-is “Herp derp but people say it like this!” then take out the “Hey, Rin,” bit.
“Drop out from your jobs”? The idea here is that he keeps getting fired. There’s a difference. One’s a term that people use, the other isn’t.
These aren’t just lol comma mistakes. They’re essential to not fucking up the script.
No. Liar. Goddammit.
Even kids know to capitalize Daddy. Where the fuck did you miss this in your education?
Like, really, dude! Avoid “like” as much as possible. We get enough of it in common speech.
because “ya damned geezer” would make way too muh sense. No, do a super-literal translation that sounds like shit. That’s the way to go!
You mean “I thought so…”?
This way, it’ll taste like a pro chef made it!
Simple fucking changes for simply stupid sentences.
No tears here!
What is this, Ayako?
During the night,
If even you won’t believe her, who can she depend on?!
“Are you available?” is the line we’d use in English.
a few times more -> many times over.
The idea is that he got hurt so he’s going to hurt MC-kun twice as hard.
“Satan’s child” is not “the demon among demons”. Work on your fucking comma usage, tards.
Overall grade: D
D for Durrrrrr
From what I’ve heard, none of the people on this project are editors. Hopefully these tips will help them fix their English for future releases.